Haha, don't worry, you're not coming across badly. (I mean, if you can take my word for it.) I'm glad that line made you laugh; you couldn't have been more amused than Alex there.
Totally with you about Babi's inherent appeal. I'll probably be all "Die! Die! Die!" towards him every time I replay the canon, now, but this was only building off my existing opinion of him. (Oh, yeah, in my headcanon about this, he never touched Sheba; he was too old and tired by the time he started in on Lalivero. And Mia never really met him until the game. Alex got reeeally unlucky.) Your dark comedy version would be pretty twisted too; anything can be written all kinds of ways, though I don't think I could picture that one unless someone else filled it. :3
Re: the extra stuff; a bit in Imil that removes the ambiguity about what happened to Alex and Mia's family, and then a bit where Kraden and Alex talk after getting out of Sol Sanctum.
(The only bit that makes a horrible sort of sense to me which wouldn't be covered by then would be the rest of Alex's stuff with the Proxians; telling Karst and Agatio at Jupiter Lighthouse that he wouldn't dream of asking for their thanks because he still thinks that's a horrible thing to do, being more comfortable travelling with people he doesn't care about because they can't be used against him, etc, but I guess sort of thing might come across already.)
Ah, I know how it is to worry after glancing over a posted comment again; last time I was all "wait what technically counts as smutty, there's a lot of graphic detail there, oh shit I hope I haven't offended anyone..."
Glad to see there's a bit of activity round the meme; if you're wondering about feedback too, btw, I'm right about to go away for the weekend, but I'll probably be doing a bunch of reading next week. :D
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Totally with you about Babi's inherent appeal. I'll probably be all "Die! Die! Die!" towards him every time I replay the canon, now, but this was only building off my existing opinion of him. (Oh, yeah, in my headcanon about this, he never touched Sheba; he was too old and tired by the time he started in on Lalivero. And Mia never really met him until the game. Alex got reeeally unlucky.) Your dark comedy version would be pretty twisted too; anything can be written all kinds of ways, though I don't think I could picture that one unless someone else filled it. :3
Re: the extra stuff; a bit in Imil that removes the ambiguity about what happened to Alex and Mia's family, and then a bit where Kraden and Alex talk after getting out of Sol Sanctum.
(The only bit that makes a horrible sort of sense to me which wouldn't be covered by then would be the rest of Alex's stuff with the Proxians; telling Karst and Agatio at Jupiter Lighthouse that he wouldn't dream of asking for their thanks because he still thinks that's a horrible thing to do, being more comfortable travelling with people he doesn't care about because they can't be used against him, etc, but I guess sort of thing might come across already.)
Ah, I know how it is to worry after glancing over a posted comment again; last time I was all "wait what technically counts as smutty, there's a lot of graphic detail there, oh shit I hope I haven't offended anyone..."
Glad to see there's a bit of activity round the meme; if you're wondering about feedback too, btw, I'm right about to go away for the weekend, but I'll probably be doing a bunch of reading next week. :D